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发布时间:2013-01-02 11:35:20 作者:林岚  发布者:41106284 浏览次数:2896  类别:中文作文  
[大学二年级] 陕西省 >> 西安市 >> 雁塔区 >> 小寨路街道


   In this century more ande more bookes turn into movies ,and much of them were different from there original work,for example ,the Girl with a Pearl Earring .

   If you see the film at first ,you may thought it sorrowful in the end .But if you read the book at first ,you could believe it have a happiness ending .Because in the film ,Griet was a timid and overcautious ,she do not have a position of apprenticeship ,she just clean the studio and then help her host with adjustment pigment and final do a model which was commissioned by Vermeer's patron ,van Ruijven .At last Catharina knew that Griet did a model with her pearl earring ,she stormed into the studio ande deminded  to see the painting ,after that she fired Griet with the host's none word .At the film's ending ,Griet received the pair of pearl earrings without a word.From the film Ithink it would be a sad ending but after read the book I believe Griet was  happy and she had a happniess ending .In the book you can see that she work in the studio as a apprenticeship and she didn't commissioned by van Ruijven mostly invited by the host .Griet got married with Peter ,and has had children with him .In the meantime ,Vermeer has died and in his will ,has left the earrings to Griet.Such a perfectly satisfactory ending!

   

This painting is known as the east the Mona Lisa, though different from the Mona Lisa mysterious and beautiful, but as a servant will just show a simple and easy temperament, without any affectation. Since the advent of since, the picture has been attracting and doubt the world and attract because subject's ordinary and free from vulgarity, confused reason is the same with the Mona Lisa, do not know the true identity and story, and painter painting when the mood and thoughts.

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       In this century more ande疑似笔误,为and)more bookes turn into应用被动语态;“改编”有专门的词组adapt into)movies ,and muchbook为可数名词,用many)of them were different from there同音异形词混淆,用their)original work,(work作“作品”讲时可以为复数)for example ,the Girl with a Pearl Earring这是书本的名字,在印刷体中,应用斜体字区别开).

       If you see the film at first ,you may thoughtmay是情态动词,后接动词原形it(注意,it后的sorrowful是形容词,故其后必须加be的形式,由于文章是一般现在时态,用is或者it is的缩写it's) sorrowful in the end .But if you read the book at first ,you could believe it have a happiness ending .Because in the film ,Griet was a timid and overcautious ,she do not have a position of apprenticeship ,she just clean the studio and then help her host with adjustment pigment and final do a model which was commissioned by Vermeer's patron ,van Ruijven .At last Catharina knew that Griet did a model with her pearl earring ,she stormed into the studio ande deminded  to see the painting ,after that she fired Griet with the host's none word .At the film's ending ,Griet received the pair of pearl earrings without a word.From the film Ithink it would be a sad ending but after read the book I believe Griet was  happy and she had a happniess ending .In the book you can see that she work in the studio as a apprenticeship and she didn't commissioned by van Ruijven mostly invited by the host .Griet got married with Peter ,and has had children with him .In the meantime ,Vermeer has died and in his will ,has left the earrings to Griet.Such a perfectly satisfactory ending!

      This painting is known as the east the Mona Lisa, though (后面加it is)different from the Mona Lisa  (注意所有格,是“蒙娜丽莎的神秘与美丽”)mysterious and beautiful,(两个单词都是形容词,不是名词) but as a servant will just show a simple and easy temperament, without any affectation. Since the advent of since,(所指何物,不明白,猜测是advanced和science) the picture has been attracting现在完成时态的被动语态,attracted)and doubt the world and attract because subject's ordinary and free from vulgarity, confused reason is the same with the Mona Lisa, do not know the true identity and story, and painter painting when the mood and thoughts. 

    综合评价:本文作者竭力想把文章写好,但对英语的语音、词性、语态的掌握相当薄弱。同时文中重点提及了一本书的名字,而不是所有人都读过你读的那本书,应该标注上汉语译文或者在文章最后加一段补充说明比较好。

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