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发布时间:2014-11-26 20:57:36 作者:钟惠琳  发布者:zhl123456 浏览次数:3837  类别:英文作文  
[初中二年级] 江西省 >> 赣州市 >> 赣县 >> 王母渡镇


Eeveryone all are specil,they have different hobbies and habits.Of course,they also have their friends.I think a ture friend reaches for your hand and touches your heart.Some people think a ture firend is like a moirror ,because of friends always tell you your defect,isn't?I have many friends,but only  few friends can care about  me.Maybe make friends isn't a easy thing.Most friends say I'm a shy girl,for this reason,I think so.My classmates are more outgoing than me,so I decide to make more friends,but notonly on study friends,care about me's people.In my class,10 % students are not have friends.I think when they are too shy and afried make friends.Friends,friends,friends,you're my books,make me feel happy.Many thing are our friends,such as teachers,parents,all kinds of animals and so on.Do you kown who's my best friend?Haha,you don't kown.Now let me tell you:My best friends is my lovely bird-XiaoHuan.She always make me lauging,she can take up I speaking English,Is she very cute?Last,I want to tell you:Don't worry,just make sure you try your best make friends and self-improvement,then you can be anything you want ,I'm sure!

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    Eeveryone all are specil,(is special) they have different hobbies and habits.Of course,they also have their friends.I think a ture friend reaches for your hand and touches your heart.Some people think a ture firend is like a moirror ,because of friends always tell you your defect,isn't?I have many friends,but only few friends (of them) can care about  me.Maybe make (making) friends isn't a easy thing.Most friends say I'm a shy girl,for this reason,I think so.My classmates are more outgoing than me,so I decide to make more friends,but not only on  friends for study,care about me's people.In my class,10 % students are not have friends.I think when they are too shy and afried make friends.Friends,friends,friends,you're my books,make me feel happy.Many thing (people) are our friends,such as teachers,parents,all kinds of animals and so on.Do you kown who's my best friend?Haha,you don't kown.(know) Now let me tell you:My best friends is my lovely bird-XiaoHuan.She always make me lauging,she can take up I speaking English,Is she very cute?Last,I want to tell you:Don't worry,just make sure you try your best make friends and self-improvement,then you can be anything (whatever) you want to be,I'm sure!

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