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An Ending Is Also A New Starting

发布时间：2015-10-18 13:53:03 作者：袁露菲  发布者：JeanNo3 浏览次数：3003  类别：英文作文  

With sweat dropping down his cheek, a runner is making a spurt at the finishing line, restarting his journey around the track of a playground. As the caption says,"An ending is also a new starting." The man who has made his achievement is not seemingly to press the pause button.
To make progress means never to be satisfied with the excellent goals you have achieved in the past. Instead, painstaking effort is definitely always one kind of necessary composition to constitute one's success. A persuasive example is James Jobs, who kept developing his already-successful product of Apple, leading to novel types of electronic appliance available nowadays. Another classic one to support the view is the famous artist in the Renaissance-Leonardo da Vinci-who was never self-contented with his works.
In the matter of fact, the standpoint that an ending means a restarting not merely applies to individuals but, of course, also meets the requirement of the development of our country. Accordingly, the country on the whole should move forward in terms of politics, economy and culture so that she can reach a long-term destination. All in all, keeping making progress ought to be the right attitude towards life and work for everybody and even for a country.

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  With sweat pouring (dropping) down his face (cheek)（感觉用“汗从他脸颊上滴落”更准确些）, a runner is making a spurt at the finishing line, restarting his journey around the track of a playground. As the caption says,"An ending is also a new starting." The man who has made his achievement is not seemingly to press the pause button.

  To make progress means never to be satisfied with the excellent mark (goals) you have got (achieved) in the past. Instead, painstaking effort is definitely always one kind of necessary compositions to constitute one's success. A persuasive example is James Jobs, who kept developing his already-successful product of Apple, leading to novel types of electronic appliance available nowadays. Another classic one to support the view is the famous artist in the Middle Ages (Renaissance文艺复兴，更准确)-Leonardo da Vinci-whose masterpieces are absolutely not a result of being self-contented (who was never self-contented with his works对自己的作品从不自满).
  In the matter of fact, the standpoint （应该写得明确些，什么观点立场） not ^only merely applies to individuals but, of course, also meets the requirement of the development of our country. Accordingly, the country on the whole should move forward in terms of politics, economy and culture so that she can reach a long-term destination. All in all, keeping making progress ought to be the right attitude towards life and work for everybody and even for a country.

         这篇文章的标题是“结束是一种新的开始”，要围绕“结束”写文章，写它的意义，例如抗日战争胜利70周年阅兵式结束了，但是人类对美好生活的期许、对世界和平的新征程才刚刚开始。从这个意义上说终点也是另外一种起点。