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Which do you prefer:Urban Life or Rural Life?

发布时间：2016-09-06 23:40:17 作者：刘鑫  发布者：1510050317 浏览次数：3496  类别：中文作文  

Which do you prefer,urban life or rural life? Different people have different thoughts.Some people love the urban life,but others love the rural life.The two lifestyles have their own advantages and disadvantages. As for me,I prefer the urban life.First of all,the growth of city is very fast.Then,the core of the country is in the cities,not in the countryside.So I think the good opportunities in the city are more.Besides,there are many famous companies in the city,so you can find a job easier with much money.However,if you want to live in the rural city,you will be tired with the busy farm and you have to get up earlier to feed the animals.In addition,you will be very tired and busy in the rural city.So I don't like it. As is known to all,the development of the city is always more advanced than the rural area.So I love to live in the urban city . Come on!

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  Which ^{kind of life （哪种生活）}do you prefer,urban life or rural life? Different people have different thoughts.Some people love the urban life but others love (like，注意换词) the rural life.The two lifestyles have their own advantages and disadvantages. As for me, I prefer the urban life. First of all,the growth (development，发展) of city is very fast.Then,the core of the country is in the cities（乡村的核心是城市，病句）,not in the countryside.So I think the good opportunities in the city are more (so不能单独成句，而且这句表示结果，对应的原因在哪).Besides,there are many famous companies in the city so you can find a job easier with much money.However,if you want to live in the rural city (没有这个说法),you will be tired with the busy farm and you have to get up earlier to feed the animals.In addition,you will be very tired and busy in the rural city.So (Therefore，因此，so的同义词) I don't like it. As is known to all,the development (infrastructure，基础设施) of the city is always more advanced than the (that in，比较级) rural area.So I love to live in the urban city . Come on!（口语，不适合）